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My poem, what do you think?

My poem, what do you think?

Postby KanadianBrett » Thu Dec 08, 2016 9:23 pm

Our people deceived
Our history seized

Our culture in ruins, run by the beasts
Love and supported by all the priests.

Our seed is holy
They teach us folly

Our culture in ruins, run by the beasts
Love and supported by all the priests.

You must accept diversity
Through the fog our people can't see

Our culture in ruins, run by the beasts
Love and supported by all the priests.

Learning from history our people don't do
The picture is so open and in clear view.

Our culture in ruins, run by the beasts
Love and supported by all the priests.

The mouth of the beast has flooded our lands
Our people so weak, they give in to their demands.

Our culture in ruins, run by the beasts
Love and supported by all the priests.

Preserve our people, our numbers dwindle
Multiculturalism is the biggest swindle.

Our culture in ruins, run by the beasts
Love and supported by all the priests.

Mongrels and traitors your time will come
Just listen for that war drum

Our culture in ruins, run by the beasts
Love and supported by all the priests.

If you are a tare
You better beware

Our culture in ruins, run by the beasts
Love and supported by all the priests.

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Re: My poem, what do you think?

Postby Teutonic » Thu Dec 08, 2016 11:26 pm

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Duty, Honour, Sacrifice.
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Re: My poem, what do you think?

Postby Kentucky » Thu Dec 08, 2016 11:53 pm

Excellent! Bravo!

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Re: My poem, what do you think?

Postby Ben88 » Thu Dec 08, 2016 11:56 pm

I like the recurring theme of loved and supported by all the priests!
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Re: My poem, what do you think?

Postby KanadianBrett » Fri Dec 09, 2016 2:55 am

Thanks Brothers, it means a lot too me!
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Re: My poem, what do you think?

Postby Fenwick » Fri Dec 09, 2016 11:01 am

KanadianBrett wrote:Preserve our people, our numbers dwindle
Multiculturalism is the biggest swindle.


I'd have gone with "multi-culti" to fit the meter, but very good. You could almost make a protest chant out of some of these lines. :D
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Re: My poem, what do you think?

Postby Nayto » Sat Dec 10, 2016 6:55 pm

Very good. Write some more for us :D
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